Do you want to write great dialogue?

Last week, I was working with a very talented young writer on his first book and I noticed he was writing dialogue confidently. Usually I see one or other extremes: either no dialogue at all, or rambling dull dialogue, but he was using it so well to move the story forward. And he’s only 10 years old. Definitely a budding author there.

Personally, I love writing dialogue, but I am always trying to improve so I read a lot of books on the craft of writing. I therefore leapt at the opportunity to take part in the blog tour for The Wordsmiths Guide to Writing Authentic Dialogue by Elizabeth Hurst. And I’m so glad I did.

Straight away it’s clear Elizabeth knows her stuff. And it’s so easy to read – not preachy, just good. I read it on my kindle relaxing on a sun lounger on holiday. And I couldn’t nod off. It gets stuck in straight away with practical insights. Did you know there are six (yes, six!) jobs that dialogue must do? Then you get into subtext: the hidden layer under the scene where the real issues unfold. As for the chapter on what to do if you feel the dreaded “As you know” sneaking in… well, it makes it sound so obvious.

Do I recommend this to anyone wanting to improve their writing, regardless of whether you are published or unpublished? Absolutely. In fact, I’m going to work my way through the whole series (there are 5 books on different aspects of planning, writing and editing). That’s how good this is.

Blurb

Do you lack confidence when writing dialogue for your fictional characters?
Do you want to learn how to make each person have a distinctive voice?

Real conversations wander. Fictional dialogue can’t afford to.

A Wordsmith’s Guide to Writing Authentic Dialogue is a practical, encouraging craft book for fiction writers who want dialogue that does more than fill the page. You’ll learn how to make every exchange purposeful, character-specific, and charged with subtext—without gimmicks, melodrama, or the dreaded “As you know…” exposition.

You will learn how to:

  • build distinct voices through rhythm, worldview, and verbal habits (not quirky spelling);
  • show status and power through questions, interruptions, silence, and topic control;
  • handle tags, beats, and action cleanly so dialogue moves instead of clogs;
  • write conflict that escalates and changes shape (without repeating itself);
  • approach trauma, consent, and emotionally heavy scenes without voyeurism or melodrama.

You’ll also find:

  • short, generic examples you can learn from immediately;
  • focused exercises you can complete in 10–20 minutes;
  • diagnose-and-rewrite case studies (where relevant);
  • checklists: quick bullet points to use while drafting and revising.

If your characters explain too much, sound the same, circle the point, or talk in a void—this guide will give you clear tools to diagnose the problem and rewrite with confidence.

Have the confidence to write dialogue that reflects the best of your characters, and the best of your writing. Pick up your copy today.

About the author

Elizabeth was born and bred in the picturesque harbour town of Whitehaven in the northwest of England, where the long, wet winters moulded her into a voracious reader of fiction to escape the dismal weather.

In 2016, Elizabeth set up her freelance editing and proofreading business, EMH Editorial Services. In 2018, she quit the corporate world and concentrated her energy full-time towards her love of the written word.

Elizabeth has published timeslip novellas (the Lost Souls series) and a stand-alone novel, A Light Shines in Darkness, based on Blessed Angelina of Marsciano. She is also the author of The Wordsmith’s Guides, a series of nonfiction books on the craft of writing.

Elizabeth now lives with her husband in the warm and sunny south of France, where the wine is cheaper than the water, and the cats spend their days hunting lizards and dreaming of the birds that roost on the roof.

Working with an illustrator

I was asked to participate in this book tour and I thought it would be interesting to find out more about how authors work with an illustrator. I’ve worked with various illustrators, graphic designers and cover designers over the years but I’m always interested in other experiences. There’s also an element of personal curiosity as it could have been me on the other side of the story as here’s a random fact: I originally wanted to be a book cover designer and was headed to Art College but changed path.

So over to the author…

This is my third highly illustrated younger Middle Grade book, and each time, I have worked closely with South African illustrator Gerda Smit. 

Gerda found me before I started putting my first book, Mister Mishkins’ Apothecary, together. She followed both my and Mister Mishkins’ accounts on Instagram, and I had a look at her website. I immediately fell in love with her work, especially a book she had done on an otter. Gerda had the animals’ expressions just right, and I knew she was the perfect person to bring my words to life. 

Over time, we have finessed the way we work together. I tend to send her chapter by chapter as a WhatsApp voice note. When Gerda listens, she plays the recording through once and then listens again. As she listens that second time, Gerda draws what she ‘see’s’ as she listens. 

Once she is happy, Gerda sends me her storyboard, and I look at it for my own ideas. Almost always, I love what she has created, but sometimes, there is a key scene in my mind that needs to be seen. We then discuss, and Gerda creates the most beautiful art from her original sketches. 

From the second book, The Magic of Mister Mishkins, onwards, I did the layout for the books myself. This makes it so much easier as I can highlight easily which illustrations may not work layout wise, and we can quickly adapt before Gerda gets to the watercolour painting stage. 

I am incredibly lucky as I have all of Gerda’s original artwork. While she may be in South Africa, through friends coming back and forth to the UK, they have been able to bring the art to me. Gerda tells me that not everyone wants their artwork, which I find incredible! For me, it is part of the journey, the world I have created for Mister Mishkins and now for Nero. The watercolours are A3, and I have them in poster books in chapter order. 

Nero the Hero is a very different book to The Magical Mister Mishkins series. He is a spin-off character, but the story itself had to be different. I couldn’t just repeat Mister Mishkins in dog form! Instead, Nero belongs to a lady called Jean. Her grandson comes to stay for the summer, and slowly, he notices that there is something different about Nero – and Nero’s relationship with his grandmother!

I could never imagine working with a different illustrator now. While Gerda and I have never met, she is a dear, dear friend, and we both get excited about the same scenes. And for Nero the Hero, I even wrote an otter into the final chapter, just as an acknowledgement of how we met. 

The third book in The Magical Mister Mishkins series will be out in September, and both cat and dog will return in 2027! I cannot wait to work with Gerda once more, and to see her breath life into my words. 

Thanks Samantha. Since this is a book tour, I’m going to include a bit more info about the book itself and of course the author also deserves a bit more recognition!

Blurb

Prepare to meet your new favourite superhero as Nero the Hero reveals his secret! 

Nero is no ordinary dog. This miniature schnauzer has a beard, a bark, and a secret. When danger strikes, he transforms into Nero the Hero, a powerful protector with extraordinary abilities.

Alongside his human, twelve-year-old Jack, Nero dives into fast-paced adventures filled with mystery, heart, and just a touch of fun. But when Jack makes a brave mistake and finds himself in real danger, Nero must face his greatest challenge yet to save his best friend alone.

Perfect for readers aged 8-12, this highly illustrated chapter book blends action-packed fantasy with an engaging, accessible style, making it ideal for reluctant readers and confident young bookworms alike. With short chapters and dynamic illustrations, Nero the Hero is a thrilling start to a children’s fantasy series about friendship, bravery, and daring rescues.

Fans of Claude and The Hounds of Penhallow Hall will love this action-filled adventure starring a heroic dog and the boy who believes in him.From the author of the popular Magical Mister Mishkins series, Samantha Mattocks introduces a bold new hero first seen in The Magic of Mister Mishkins. Beautifully illustrated by Gerda.

About the author

Samantha Mattocks is best known for her highly illustrated Middle Grade books in The Magical Mister Mishkins series. Her words have transported readers across all her work to another place, one filled with magic, inspiration, dreams, and more.

An award-winning journalist and author, Samantha lives in Norfolk. She owns The Arabian Magazine, a beautiful publication that celebrates the Arabian horse. She was on MasterChef UK in 2019.

I want to discuss this book with you!

We often tell kids how important it is to read books that open up new worlds—stories that reflect different lives, voices, and experiences. My absolute top pick so far this year is We Need New Names by NoViolet Bulawayo (please read this!), and I enjoyed The Hair Dare by Faith Knight (see my interview with the author here). But I believe if we want young readers to explore beyond the familiar, we’ve got to lead the way. Plus of course reading diversely isn’t just good for children—it’s good for all of us. So although my blog usually focuses on kids books, every now and then I sneak in a grown up book. This is one of these times.

As well as being by a black author, The Marriage Monitoring Aunties Association by Ola Awonubi is also the first book positioned as a Christian read that I’ve picked up. I’m not particularly religious myself, so I wasn’t sure what to expect when a book has a faith-based back story but it is naturally woven into the themes about family and Nigerian culture. And the main character is older – what a treat to not be reading a romcom with a 30-year-old lead!

I remember being deeply frustrated by Tess of the d’Urbervilles which I read for one of my A-level English texts as she was so passive to “fate”, and I feel that the family pressures here are sort of similar in a way – actually I really want to debate this with my bookish buddies as I suspect it will split opinions, and it’s certainly not an obvious comparison. This need to discuss is the mark of a great book to my mind!

So what did I think? It’s interesting, well written, great characters, and thought provoking, and here is a competition (UK only) to win a copy for yourself. Good luck!

Giveaway to Win a Paperback copy of The Marriage Monitoring Aunties Association (Open to UK only)

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Blurb

Friendships – fantastic. Family – getting better. Career – promotion on the cards.

Romance – *seriously delayed*

Sade Sodipo is ready to meet ‘the one’ and finally fulfil the Nigerian Dream. So far God hasn’t performed that little miracle quite yet, but it’ll happen this year for sure. Especially if her mother, two best friends, younger sister and all those in the unofficial Marriage Monitoring Aunties Association, have anything to say about it.

She might love her job, have great friends, and even own her own home, but according to the meddling aunties, this is why she’s still single at 50. Not wanting to turn into a bitter aunty herself, Sade knows it’s time to get serious, but the options aren’t looking great – zero potential at church, work or in her social life.

What if her prayers for the perfect man have got lost? Or maybe Sade’s happy-ever-after is right on time…

Author Bio

Ola Awonubi is an award-winning author, creative writing tutor, and speaker, known for her compelling storytelling that bridges cultures and histories. Born in London to Nigerian parents, she spent part of her childhood in Nigeria before returning to the UK, where she pursued her passion for writing.

At the age of 40, Ola rekindled her dream of becoming a writer and earned an MA in Creative Writing from the University of East London. Her talent quickly gained recognition—her short story The Pink House won first prize in the National Words of Colour competition (2008), and The Go-Slow Journey secured first prize in the fiction category of Queen Mary Wasafiri’s New Writing Prize (2009). She was also honored with the Best Author CA Award (2019).

Ola has authored eight books, including Love’s PersuasionLove Me Unconditionally, and the anthology Naija Love Stories. Her historical fiction novel, A Nurse’s Tale, published by One More Chapter Books (HarperCollins) in July 2023, became a bestseller in Canada, earning a spot on The Globe and Mail’s historical fiction chart. It was also recognized by the Brown Girl Collective as a favorite historical fiction book of 2024.

Her upcoming romantic comedy, The Marriage Monitoring Aunties’ Association, is set for release in Summer 2025, as part of a two-book deal. She is also working on a Jane Austen adaptation set in Lagos, currently under consideration by publishers and agents.

Beyond her writing, Ola is a creative writing tutor and speaker, sharing her expertise at prestigious events such as the Black British Book Festival, Meet-Cute Romance Festival, and London Festival of Writing. She will also be speaking at The London Writers Festival, Jericho Writers Conference, inspiring aspiring authors with her insights on storytelling, publishing, and book marketing.

Ola’s work has been featured in Afreada, Brittle Paper, Story Time, Woven Tale Press, and NaijaStories.com, with over 15 short stories published across various literary platforms.

Through her Substack newsletter, “The Resilient Writer,” she provides actionable writing guidance, digital resources, and industry insights, helping fellow creatives refine their craft and build their author brands.

Can you be harassed by a chicken?

True story. My dad used to work in wildlife conservation and was once called out because a man was being harassed by a pigeon. It would wait for the poor chap to come out of his house and then start attacking his head. He had to wear a hat. It would even follow him in the car and attack him again when he got out at the end of his journey. On that basis, Thomas Tucker (or just Tucker to everyone who knows him) being picked on by a chicken is entirely plausible. And if you have a chicken (or pigeon) on your head, you might very well fall down a hole. So Tucker’s Time Machine Telescope is practically a true story.

This is the fourth (I think) book by Robin Bennett I’ve reviewed, and I’m always delighted when an invitation to review one pops into my inbox. Like his other books, it’s a snappy fun read. Here is a typical bit that made me smile:

‘the flapping chicken wings in his face meant he couldn’t see the small hole left by workers in the middle of the pavement.

Luckily he missed it.

Unluckily, there was a much larger hole right next to it.’

Cue an eclectic set of adventures for Tucker (and the chicken).

Perfect for independent reading but, since I promise you’ll enjoy it as much as the kids, this would be a great book to read aloud.

Blurb

Thomas Tucker (or just Tucker to everyone who knows him) is walking innocently down the street when he is attacked by a chicken and falls down a hole. Unlikely as it sounds, this is how he ends up finding the Time Machine Telescope.

Unfortunately, Tucker seems to attract chaos and bad luck the same way that someone standing on top of a mountain waving a metal pole will eventually attract lightning and a free Xray.

Can he survive killer robots, Tudor kings, dinosaurs … and Kylo Hens long enough to complete his Time Machine Wish List

  • GET RICH 
  • HAVE FUN! 
  • GET MUM AND DAD TO SPEND LESS TIME ON THEIR MOBILE PHONES

There’s only one way to find out…

About the author

When Robin grew up he thought he wanted to be a cavalry officer until everyone else realised that putting him in charge of a tank was a very bad idea. He then became an assistant gravedigger in London. After that he had a career frantically starting businesses (everything from dog-sitting to cigars, tuition to translation)… until finally settling down to write improbable stories to keep his children from killing each other on long car journeys.

Meet the Superhero Who Hears the World Differently

Since my dad is currently considering a cochlear implant, I was keen to chat to the author, Helen Dunlap Newton, about her new book ‘Careful What You Hear’ which is currently on tour. You can read reviews on these other blogs, or scroll down to hear what the author had to say and a competition (sorry, it’s just for US readers) …

Blurb

After a surgical mix-up gave 13-year-old Noah Baker mind reading powers, he becomes a spy tasked with stopping the bad guys. Ever since he accidentally got an experimental cochlear implant, Noah and his secret agent partner, Lena, have been going on secret missions for the government. Now, they’re in for a reward for all their hard work—Space Camp! But all is not as it seems. When Noah accidentally overhears thoughts that reveal a plot to steal top secret plans from nearby Redstone Arsenal, he must make a choice.

A quick fire chat with the author

1. If you could chose any superpower, what would it be? Flying! I used to have dreams as a kid that I could fly.

2. What would be the worst thought you could imagine overhearing? The worst thoughts would be finding out someone I thought was my friend had terrible thoughts about me.

3. Do you have any personal experience with hearing loss (adults or children) that you drew on? Yes. There was a family in my childhood church. The husband and wife were both deaf but their children could hear. They were precious people and I was fascinated with how they communicated. I also had several students who were deaf and have friends who have cochlear implants.

4. If not, how did you ensure an authentic portrayal of hearing loss? Even with the experiences I described above, I also did extensive research.

5. Did you use/ consider using a sensitivity reader? Yes, I interviewed two people who have cochlear implants. In CAREFUL WHAT YOU HEAR, I introduced a character who is from the Lenape (Delaware) tribe. My husband is part Delaware and I have a friend who is Delaware. All of these people were sensitivity readers of my manuscript.

5. Are there more in the series planned? I am working on the third and final novel in the series. It does not have a title yet.

Giveaway to Win a $15 IndieBound e-gift card (to buy books with) (Open to US Only)*Terms and Conditions –US entries welcome. 

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About the Author

Award-winning author Helen Dunlap Newton is a veteran middle grade language arts teacher and a member of the Society of Children’s Book Writers and Illustrators. Both Night of the Amber Moon and Do You Hear What I Hear? were finalists for the Oklahoma Book Award and received the Creative Women of Oklahoma Award. In addition to writing, she enjoys reading, music, and helping her husband care for backyard chickens and an energetic Australian shepherd in Tulsa, Oklahoma.